All Comments on 'Life'

I enjoyed your poem (~_~)

I like that you are really thinking about constructing the poem. This is evident in your application of consistent structure. The thing that is more important than structure, though, is how to get your ideas across in ways that suit the message and say those ideas in ways that haven't been said dozens or thousands of times before. "wish I'd never been born" for instance, is lacking the shock value that the idea, when taken literally, has. It lacks shock value because almost any teenager has said this once or several times a day even. Find new ways to say these important things and THEN worry about structure. Thank you for inviting feedback. I hope to see you keep writing and growing with us here. Noone here is at the end of the journey, and the more we strive the better we get.