All Comments on 'Liquid Love'

That would be a loud, groaning yes!

Nice mix of the ingenuous with the obscene- very effective erotica. Still consider your line breaking, though; the end of a line is prime real estate.

That we can consume and drink in the flow of sensuality until it spills over the edge. Nicely put!

I give you an "A" for originality. The line breaks don't really bother me, but you could have restructured the poem to have fewer lines...it might be worthwhile to experiment.

...the answer is a loud, heart pounding, pelvic thrusting yes.

Wowza...

What a thought to have.

Think I need to try that one.

*Big Grins*

Wonderfully Hot imagery here...

More Plez~!!