All Comments on 'Memory, Devoured by Leaves'

forest floor be damp indeed

but quietness aches for echoes

ache for need

I am listening, whisper your memories

in deluge of leaves

Shhhhh... Three Hs are enough. I have a thing about shhhhhhhs and ohhhhhhs.

Oh, the dampness! A bit too much. Maybe drop the (oh) or the (!).

The title was poetry. The poem is very good. Hope you don't mind the insignificant suggestions. :)

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I agree with Eve about the title.

There seems to be a new smallness to your writing,

even the other seemed gentle.

It is very good

I was immediately drawn in. Immediately, and held there, although the whence always makes me wince as does oh. just me. I have other comments, if you want, just ask, I hate being nit picky in public :)especially with terrific poems