All Comments on 'Might These High Seas...'

Billy B. You know of my war against rhyming couplets, breaks the pattern. Amusing. I'll consider it a parody of sorts, but skirts it "When on the phone she attests," although, "Lest I protest her request;" Not exactly high poetry. New writers take note, four pattern, question, question, question, answer. Does not take it past the law of diminishing returns. A 5

I wrote "who do I believe?" when in my tablet it read, "Who's plea might I believe?" For anyone who's interested, it read:

Might these high seas deceive?

When her laughter sounds near mine ear.

Who's plea might I believe?

When I see upon her chest,

Breaking waves merely crest.

To who do I atone?

When on the phone she attests,

Lest I protest her request;

To be always hers to press,

And always hers possessed.

....small, slightly anal-retentive comment - should it not be "to WHOM do I attone"? Other than that it read smoothly for me.

Tess

Also tripped over who/whom ....... like the last stanza very clever