All Comments on 'Mouse In The House'

It might be profitable to take a good hard look at the structure of this. It seems at times you are trying too hard to get words to rhyme, and the rhymes are not consistent throughout the structure. Sometimes you don't rhyme ending words at all, other times you have three rhyming words in one sentence. That makes reading the poem like driving over "speed bumps!" Your ideas are humorous, but perhaps a more consistent rhyming structure would improve the poems readability.