by WriterDom
Got me bricked, thought about my girl when I busted to this. Reminds me of a good sex I had with her, she loves to be spanked. The chm got everywhere
Don't listen to the critics . . . it made me extremely wet. ;D
I ejoyed the beginning of the poem as it was bang on, excuse the pun, but from the ass slap to the end you lost me. For someone so understanding of the clitoris it was anti climactic to read sex was fron behind and no longer engaging the clit at all. Did she orgasm? She seemed to begin as the focus then took a back seat to the penis in the latter half.
Very well done, vivid, and just as if you were watching me as I do the same to my wife.
OKIES...might just have to add this to a favs list...tasteful and vivid...LOVED it...Yes VERY well done
*looks around for Lover to try talking him into fulfilling THAT poem*
Tasteful and realistic. So vivid I could almost taste it.
Very well done.
Very powerful imagery... i can feel what you are describing when i read this...damn very hot
That was a very erotic poem. This is also my first time at this erotic stories website. I myself write erotica. I have my own erotic blog. I'd love to send you the URL, but I don't have an email for you. I love BDSM fantasies and literature, but haven't yet experience enough of it! I love spanking, also! And cunnilingus, tantra, full-body orgasms, and my glass dildo! Women, men, rock bands, panta panta pant!!!! Love, Linda from the SF Bay Area in Calif.
Can't imagine you not being a great lover.
O'sMG you so turned me with words.
This is really good, the imagery, left me turned on to say the least.
Generally I dislike poems without end punctuation. Nonetheless the, *blushes* erm...impact of this poem was profound. Therefore a 5 from me. *runs to the bedroom*
Nice tone and tempo I thought it was a nice to read even got me wanting this girl. Your voice is great! Keep writing.
my girl read this as i ate her and the orgasm was awesome
Your words jumped straight from the computer screen forming a pleasurous cyclone that swirled around my center, leaving me dizzy with desire and need.
This was not only very well written, and thought out, but is also indicative that it is written by someone with great knowledge of what takes a woman beyond the edge of passion and pushes her into the abyss.
that was just really hot you are a good writer, and i am thinking you are probablly an excellent lover
mmm that is sexxxy...love the visuals and how hot it got me.