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A couple small suggestions

If I may be so bold

To your praise to submission:

Drop one here word and Her presence becomes stronger ~

"Under kind, intuitive but watchful gaze,

She gently commands me."

Becomes stronger this way ~

"Under kind, intuitive but watchful gaze,

She gently commands."

Another spot for a possible snip ~

" She washes over me, breathtaking, like a delirious wave."

That one word, breathtaking, seems just a bit much, as all that precedes makes this point clear. This way the focus is on the sub; take away this word and the focus shifts to Mistress' power ~

" She washes over me like a delirious wave."

Do continue with these themes you write and, in time, expand on your skills. Awaiting more.