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Click herePillow clouds boil up over the sea
in springs unconstant sky.
They fight the old man from the north
pushing him farther away.
Waves pound with the force of change,
nothing is easy in nature.
Sparrow in the air
it's flight razor sharp.
Sun scathing green feathers,
fighting brothers
for the same lover.
The wind moves cold against my skin
whispering secrets of warmth.
The only constant in this world is change,
nothing is easy in nature.
I have a small problem with this contradiction. Contradiction, should be in a series, otherwise it will be perceived as a mistake. I know change is mentioned, but...
"The wind moves cold against my skin
whispering secrets of warmth."
good line:
"in springs unconstant sky."
good stanza:
"Sparrow in the air
it's flight razor sharp.
Sun scathing green feathers,
fighting brothers
for the same lover."
is all that needs to be said. that doesn't mean i'm not gonna pick up my favorite lines.
Sparrow in the air
it's flight razor sharp.
Sun scathing green feathers,
fighting brothers
for the same lover.
provide an invigorating breath of fresh air. Very nice!
blow constant <grin>
I loved your write, enchanting poetry~ 'winds of change' are strong enough <smile>
but I have to agree with ishtat. The ending could be stronger. Despite that, good job. :)
Some very nice images and clean phrasing. An excellent poem.
Flyguy
you paint your portraits in metaphors so vivid, they can be seen by the blind. The lines that just captivated Me were, "Sun scathing green feathers, fighting brothers for the same lover". Another beautiful description of nature that makes Me glad I'm alive to notice <smile>
Vixxx
Good picture of movement and change. But I keep thinking swallows not sparrows? last two lines might have been a bit sharper but maybe it's me being a bit picky.