All Comments on 'North by Northwest'

create a visual playground...very enjoyable work...bluerain

Good picture of movement and change. But I keep thinking swallows not sparrows? last two lines might have been a bit sharper but maybe it's me being a bit picky.

you paint your portraits in metaphors so vivid, they can be seen by the blind. The lines that just captivated Me were, "Sun scathing green feathers, fighting brothers for the same lover". Another beautiful description of nature that makes Me glad I'm alive to notice <smile>

Vixxx

Some very nice images and clean phrasing. An excellent poem.

Flyguy

but I have to agree with ishtat. The ending could be stronger. Despite that, good job. :)

blow constant <grin>

I loved your write, enchanting poetry~ 'winds of change' are strong enough <smile>

provide an invigorating breath of fresh air. Very nice!

is all that needs to be said. that doesn't mean i'm not gonna pick up my favorite lines.

Sparrow in the air

it's flight razor sharp.

Sun scathing green feathers,

fighting brothers

for the same lover.

I have a small problem with this contradiction. Contradiction, should be in a series, otherwise it will be perceived as a mistake. I know change is mentioned, but...

"The wind moves cold against my skin

whispering secrets of warmth."

good line:

"in springs unconstant sky."

good stanza:

"Sparrow in the air

it's flight razor sharp.

Sun scathing green feathers,

fighting brothers

for the same lover."