by ~hellbaby~
Something lasts forever,
it's the joy or pain
you carry in your soul.
1980????!! Two points - you show high maturity here, despite a few minor weak points, and, - now you're starting off into the prime of your life.
In two places near the beginning of the poem, you use "where" and I think you really mean "were"...
but an interesting read nonetheless.
This classic poem is still going strong after all these years.
Well written, as is all you do!