All Comments on 'on Joinings'

"Reflected shadows in

panes of shattered lake

surfaces"

ohhhhh, that's purdy! Even if I might remove "surfaces" with the use of "panes" it's pretty understood, I would think. You like the big words too, Jazzy, but they only kill me once in awhile. Good thing I have that built in dictionary. "agglomerate" and "accreted" one right after the other, made me lose your imagery, because I's not as edumacated. Pretty good poem, I struggled with clarity here and there, but I enjoyed it anyway. Plus, you have some meter that sneaks up on the reader, and I enjoy little suprises like that.

are waaay too dark for me, but lately, I have seen something I didnt see before. I love your images Razz, and especially the way that you use words to make them sound alive. this is really good, it sounded right, worked perfectly for me, thank you :)

vivid imagery, RazzRajen. Especailly the last two stanzas. Good work, much enjoyed.