All Comments on 'On the Bus From Allentown'

I have been ON that bus from Allentown. Never quite like this damn it.

:)

AS

I don't know if this poem is a fiction or not but it takes me back through the years to when I was about seventeen and I had a similar bus ride except it was on the 208 from Sheffield :-).

Fond memories. If I could I'd give you 10/5 for reminding me.

After all that nostalgia I think it is a good poem too!

b'brig

You need to take another look at your punctuation. It was very inconsistent between strophes. While the poem had some great imagery and potential, just didn't rock my world as written.