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by marichuwill

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HarryHillHarryHillalmost 11 years ago
This is actually pretty good

imo needs to be broken up into images. The fact that I am a bearded, hairy man has no influence on the 5; well, not much. :)

GuiltyPleasureGuiltyPleasurealmost 11 years ago
Well....

...I don't have a beard but I liked this too but the strung out words are not an asset to the reader and add nothing to your work......

Taste my titties Papi

yes

your beard and tongue feel

so good against my

warm

brown

breasts......

etc. Just a suggestion.

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