All Comments on 'Perpetual Reticence'

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todski28todski28about 10 years ago
A look at masculinity

and the ways in which the need to be strong chains some thoughts and deeds in a choke of regret for me,

the repeating phrasal rhythm cut out just before it killed the poem, if there had been one more stanza I would have quit reading, but you hammered the point home with out bending the nail. good use of punctuation to control the flow of the read, and enough of a rhythm break out in the last two to force the mind to concentrate on the words as opposed to the sounds.

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Can I now change bio? oggbashan was diagnosed as terminally ill and expected to be dead by June 2018. As you can see. I am still here. . As long as I can I will continue writing and posting on Literotica but there will be an end - soon. I don't expect anyone to like ALL of my...