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by shattered_lily

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 19 years ago
Nice emotion

I love the first stanzas, but the last bit needs polishing. You have all the emotion present, but you want to trim the excess. Write on!

~Syn

AnonymousAnonymousabout 19 years ago
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Good engine but needs tuning up a bit.I agree with the previous comment.Second part seems a bit self indulgent & could be pruned quite hard. Watch spelling too.

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