All Comments on 'Renee'

nice work

Sounds like a song - happy and light. Nice. Because it does have a song like quality, I think it would be stronger by separating the last line from the second stanza and repeating it. But it is nice as is.

there is what I suspect is an unintentional bit of hilarity here

It's love they say – I call it Renee

Joy,

Joy is all around.

Who is Joy and if she is around is Renee OK, fine but are they OK with Dawn, being the one waking you up?

I fived, but if April shows up that is going too far.

And when I see the sign that points one way

The lot we used to pass by every day

Just walk away, Renée

You won't see me follow you back home

The empty sidewalks on my block are not the same

You're not to blame

From deep inside the tears that I'm forced to cry

From deep inside the pain I, I chose to hide

Just walk away, Renée

You won't see me follow you back home

Now as the rain beats down upon my weary eyes

For me it cries

Just walk away, Renée

You won't see me follow you back home

Now as the rain beats down upon my weary eyes

For me it cries

Your name and mine

Inside a heart upon a wall

Still finds a way to haunt me

Though they're so small

Just walk away, Renée

You won't see me follow you back home

The empty sidewalks on my block are not the same

You're not to blame

Lyrics from <a href="http://www.elyrics.net">eLyrics.net</a>

Lyrical.

personal poem