- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Rolling Wishes on Ice
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A penny for wish
tossed into the pond
bounces off of ice
and rolls.
Glinting orange in the setting sun
It rolls
Over the hard, cold surface
Against the wind
It rolls
Slowly turning a corner
Despite the odds
It rolls
Not knowing where it is going
A tiny break in the ice
Someone managed to chip free
The wish rolls
and falls straight in,
already having come true.
- COMMENTS
twelveooneover 19 years agocall me thick, I have no idea what this is about.
This is a strong visual piece:
the short line
"It rolls" - 3x
the other two lines
with "rolls", shorter also, drawing attention to, very effectively, what is the most important word here.
It mimics... and you seem to be writing with a slow rhythm
irishcatsmeowover 19 years agoeven a penny never knows where it will end up (or does it?)...great portrayal of synchronicity. This poem is subtle but says so much.
