All Comments on 'Roses'

to like in this hard poem. If I may say, I would reorganise it a little, break the lines up more, make it look more like a poem when towards the end it looks like prose. At the beginning, the lies maybe should come before the hits? But altogether a really good effort. Please write more.

This is a powerful piece, but it goes over very familiar ground. It is a simple narrative which tells the story, but does not go past being a cautionary tale. It would be much stronger if you explored the "why" of the situation.