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great ending, made me laugh

Excellent work. I love this type of poetry, concrete and upbeat. Nice job.

to transform everday things into statements about life..

that is art

Wonderful stuff

I hope to see more..

Thank you

Fabulous ending!

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...here is a statement from a new poet! Some very strong phrases, and very well controlled. The last line is a knockout! (edit -- you either need the word 'of' at the beginning of the 7th line, or a comma at the end of the sixth. I tried and tried to see a reason for the line extension near the end of the 2nd stanza, and came to the conclusion that is was an error or formatting problem....otherwise, it makes no sense to me to do that there.

this was a great read,

i loved the impact in the last line!

great read ty!