All Comments on 'Secret Places'

and good ideas, perhaps some excess wordage that does not need to be included

for example, you might drop the word "then" from this line but as you prefer

"Exhausted then,

our bodies rest, panting,"

when is desire not inviting? also when is it not a cliche, how many times have you heard such things before

senses melt, burning need, so deep they slide in you, Secret places, etc.

take a walk with me through new poems and watch the souls melt, i.e read and leave comments, you'll see how fast it gets old.

I didn't vote