All Comments on 'Sloe Seller Dor'

in the new poems review thread.

I remember being impressed with this when I saw it in the contest. I love the unusual wording to match the unusual character.

"at the

fair last fall."

She is a great character!

"She has bottles

everywhere. Some are

empty, but most are filled to

some degree by

berries and gin

or by berry-tinged

gin waiting to be

strained pure."

awesome image, unique...

I would recommend you change the title for uses other than the contest, and consider switching up on the "She" phrase that starts a few stanzas.

ex. Bottles are everywhere. instead of She has bottles everywhere, etc.

Excellent!

annaswirls

and love the smoothness of the lines as they flowed. good images too.

I see her in

my mind as

easily as I saw

her at the

fair last fall.

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that is what i really like the best here. a lot of power in them words. we all have our individual taste. nicely done.....don

I love the visual

images in this, it paints

the picture in my mind.

Lovely well wriiten poetry,

a pleasure to read.

Thanks.

~ Jenn

I thought this was a great write the 1st time I read it. I still do. sand