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twelveoonetwelveooneabout 11 years ago
5ed

you got good stuff

blue bed of fluff and fuck and failure

to stop crying over spilled milk and seventeen pints of blood and placenta. Just clean it up.

I'm afraid the arrangement buries some of it

Just clean it up.

and wonder of this would be better

blue bed of fluff, fuck and failure

dam-an, wish I would have wrote

HarryHillHarryHillabout 11 years ago
Nice Susan, the lines went running through my head...

...in freeze frame images. Liked the other too.

susansnowsusansnowabout 11 years agoAuthor
Thanks.

Thanks for the feedback, folks. Much appreciated.

erectus123erectus123about 11 years ago
well done-5

unconventional, needs work but still over the top real life pathos

lonelyhousewife32lonelyhousewife32about 11 years ago

this one really strikes a deep chord with me. thank you for sharing.

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Single female writer. Most of my work is an effort to unlock my true self from the trauma of a lifetime of violent experiences, both sexual and nonsexual. I enjoy using the prose poetry style but have been known to venture from and to form and category. I enjoy reading comment...