by Icingsugar
is excellent, and the rhythm even better..I like your *spree* writing Icingsugar, keep it up ;) maria
of this piece and of course, the language. If I had to pick a favourite part it would be,
"...sliding
slippery on top of me
scripting a trail
of strawberry flavoured
saliva over still, somehow,
summer tanned skin..."
....(paraphrasing) "The best poems are the ones I wish I'd written" I wish.
'Nuff said.
Just wanted to type that line in myself, it feels great--you got right to me on this one, such energy and FUN! I loved the sound of the ending and your playful juggling act with words.