tagErotic Poetrystormy night

stormy night

bytodski28©

Lightning strikes
Loud crashes as the air is rent, penetrated
Flashes and glimpses of tanned tawny flesh
Smooth as polished marble yet supple,
Trace the line of your calf from your feet
To the ticklish place behind your knee
Relish your naked form
Each strike silhouettes
Scenes of delicious decadence
Your cries our thunder
bodies twitching our lightning
we lasted longer than the storm

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by todski2807/24/13

Yay more home work.

Thanks Harry. For the heads up

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by HarryHill07/23/13

for Desejo

I think the term 12 used was casement or framing
I liked it Tod for the simple reason that you are moving to distill your thoughts. Read up on minimalism if you have time

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by todski2807/23/13

How can I not agree

with the final line being omitted? I feel that it would read much better as you suggested. I wasn't looking for cute at all Angeline.

Desejo, I like your addition it seems to give it finality or box in.more...

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by Desejo07/22/13

Really nice - and no violence! (inside joke)
I agree with Antagie about the final line. Consider completing the circle with just one final word: strikes. I think 1201 calls it a box, or something likemore...

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by twelveoone07/22/13

in a thread, I just advised

get in do what you have to do and get out, ignore, you've already done that
ticklish/Relish -good one
Each strike silhouettes - good
5ed

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