All Comments on 'Swirls of honey'

I particularly enjoyed the anticipation of the breaking of the seal, followed by the secondary thrust.

Who knew honey melted would taste so fine,

I've tried it myself and it is simply divine ;)

This is good, tod, although the choice of "sullied" I question given the definition. I couldn't match it up with "sugary delight."

Was the comma at end of the poem, a typo or a graphic suggesting something private to follow?

liquid heat .......

.......the flavour

of honey

melted ......

very erotic , suggestive ..... naughty ..... 5-ed !!

Read it through several times to enjoy it. I agree with Green about the word "sullied." I wasn't sure where you were going to start with, but let it go and just enjoyed it.

question the first line

syrup sullied in sugary delight - sullied?

suppose it wasn't there, suppose an expected word was, would it catch your attention?

Ok - good lead in. but you fail to exploit the word, elsewhere what is sullied?

You have the alliteration down, back it down slightly, work on assonance a bit-you are doing fine BTW.

su,su,su, suc. But what happened in S3 and S4 (end) peters out. spread it around.

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The word 'sullied, gave me pause at the beginning, making me stop and think, "What does he want me to picture here?" After that the poem flowed just like a spoonful dipped and swirling in a hot cup of tea.

I reread it again and I have mixed thoughts on "sullied". My first though, written above, but my second thought is that it creates that first-dip moment where things begin mix, a tease, before actually stirring.

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