All Comments on 'Synchronized Swimming'

Okay, I read it a few times. I do like it. Love the odd images I'm getting in my head. Like the story. I think I'd like it better if it was tightened up some. Maybe chop a few words. I'm a word chopper. :)

as if you turned a magician's hat inside out and out fell this poem. The other thing it made me think is that it could be the untold story of rocky raccoon. Side B. :-)

Your poem has been recommended in the New Poems Review Thread on the Poetry Feedback and Discussion Forum. Thanks for the read!

I think I went for a ride, but lost my head along the way. You really "Seused" me, Bill. Nice one.

My type of poetry but along with Eve, I think it needs tightening up a little. The second stanza contradicts the first stanza. Even in illogical surrealist poetry, there needs to be an internal logic that works. There is a great poem trying to get out of a good effort.

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I think it's just been my head that's been turned inside out but I liked it so much I went back and read it .. several times .. and intend to return again

this is a trippy poem, Bill. I loved it. The first two lines make it. I disagree with whoever said you need to tighten it, ( i only got a glimpse) the lines are already syllable tight, to me anyway. Good work sharing a glimpse into this 2de2mind.

this is a trippy poem, Bill. I loved it. The first two lines make it. I disagree with whoever said you need to tighten it, ( i only got a glimpse) the lines are already syllable tight, to me anyway. Good work sharing a glimpse into this mind.

An odd little piece; it's not juicy juice but a more potent product of the grape.

Do you think we could put the cat in the hat

on the horse ? I mean hey, lets really mess

with my mind.. Now Bill, I did enjoy the read

because the way you write is always in riddle to

me, lol.. is that because I am blonde ? hmm,

The words do have a nice feel to the tongue.

Thank you, from the bottom of my peach pick'n

heart !

kisses..

sGp

Dada poetry crunches like no other...

absurd amondo, I would take my hat off if I had a head with no history.

What can I say? I'm a fan.