- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Synchronized Swimming
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Click hereHe was willing but unable
to turn himself inside out.
He had been trying
for weeks
with no success.
If he were to go to the store
and buy a horse with no history
he might at least look life in the eye
as he crashed his car
into the concrete embankment.
He drove his horse to a parking garage
in a town that was inhabited
by people who had no idea
who the cat in the hat was.
The garage was in a bad mood
and the fast motion
of a look of regret
shuffled across his mind
as he watched the dishes
turn into an elaborate
musical production number.
- COMMENTS
twelveooneabout 16 years agoabsurd amondo, I would take my hat off if I had a head with no history.
What can I say? I'm a fan.
sweet GA peachesabout 16 years agoDo you think we could put the cat in the hat
on the horse ? I mean hey, lets really mess
with my mind.. Now Bill, I did enjoy the read
because the way you write is always in riddle to
me, lol.. is that because I am blonde ? hmm,
The words do have a nice feel to the tongue.
Thank you, from the bottom of my peach pick'n
heart !
kisses..
sGp
LeBrozabout 16 years agoAn odd little piece; it's not juicy juice but a more potent product of the grape.
normal jeanabout 16 years agothis is a trippy poem, Bill. I loved it. The first two lines make it. I disagree with whoever said you need to tighten it, ( i only got a glimpse) the lines are already syllable tight, to me anyway. Good work sharing a glimpse into this mind.
normal jeanabout 16 years agothis is a trippy poem, Bill. I loved it. The first two lines make it. I disagree with whoever said you need to tighten it, ( i only got a glimpse) the lines are already syllable tight, to me anyway. Good work sharing a glimpse into this 2de2mind.
UnderYourSpellabout 16 years agoI think it's just been my head that's been turned inside out but I liked it so much I went back and read it .. several times .. and intend to return again
bogusbrigabout 16 years agoMy type of poetry but along with Eve, I think it needs tightening up a little. The second stanza contradicts the first stanza. Even in illogical surrealist poetry, there needs to be an internal logic that works. There is a great poem trying to get out of a good effort.
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Anonymousabout 16 years agoI think I went for a ride, but lost my head along the way. You really "Seused" me, Bill. Nice one.
Angelineabout 16 years agoas if you turned a magician's hat inside out and out fell this poem. The other thing it made me think is that it could be the untold story of rocky raccoon. Side B. :-)
Your poem has been recommended in the New Poems Review Thread on the Poetry Feedback and Discussion Forum. Thanks for the read!
