All Comments on 'The Beach'

Same is true here. You paint lovely images... instead of forcing them into a false sounding rhyme scheme, free them up so they can fly and crash and dip. I think if you do, the reader will feel the poem rather than simply read it.

I suspect that when you begin to trust your voice, and eschew the devices, your words will touch a lot of folks.

I came drifting by today and your title caught my eye.

I write fair mindless poetry from time to time. Geo.

is correct this poem was forced, let the tide take you

away beyond the breakers where rhyme has this poem trapped.

Love the subject matter.

You do paint great imagery and even better, you add a bit of audio too. ;)

I'll meet you on the beach any time. Although non-erotic poetry there is an overtone of love here which shines through, and makes it more beautiful still.

I could almost hear the waves and smell the salt sea air

LilDarlin, If I could hit the lottery I'd pack for Florida for the next 4 months. You make it sound so nice on the beach. I might even find a fella to hold hands with. Keep writing.

A hymn to happily ever after;

if only it could be

that happily ever after

we all long to feel