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Click hereDown here where the hot dark blows,
On knees in streaming avenues
Bend to me and yielding know
The pleasure of this having you.
Give up your fear, rise up and stand
And turn your face in shadowed shame.
When love has gone far as love can,
Leave me there. Sell me your name.
Rise up sweet naked press to me
On knees 'neath the hammers surrender doubt.
The twisting surge of destiny
Has pushed you here. Has found you out.
Very good. I loved the word play in the first stanza, the knees streaming added a nice feel to the read. The only thing that bothered me was the extended line on your final rhyme. The compression of "beneath" and the extra syllables in the line gave an otherwise excellent rhyme pair (doubt/out) a forced feel. Beyond that, I thought this was an excellent poem. Well done.
jim :)