All Comments on 'The Cotton Candy Kid'

....the makings of a good "story" poem but your count is off all through the poem. Try reading your poem aloud to yourself counting off the syllables - tap your fingers as you read, it helps. That way you can find where a line lacks or has too many beats.

I hope you rework this, it has such promise.

Tess

Very well done....loved it as it read like a 'naughty Western tale' ;)

A fun poem that I really enjoyed made me smile but as Tess said your meter is out here and there

cute, with a name like Cotton Candy Kid I expected some muff diving (been reading too much Girlie Girl I guess). But I like it just the way is. -R