All Comments on 'The Porridge King'

this is one hell of a poem. It's tough, and real, and I like it.

This poem was amazing. I'm finding myself without the right words. But I'll try. *grins*

Your imagery, the jagged consistency you formed, just hit the mark. I felt like I knew this atmosphere even though I know nothing about it. I was there, and I was in it. I was reading it aloud and loving how it felt on my tongue as I did.

The only thing that I would even attempt to say didn't work was the continued use of your guy and the other guy. Sometimes they were too close together, and perhaps finding another way to differentiate the characters would be better.

That's not to say that I didn't love love love this poem. I've tasted your words and I want more, sug.

...hard-boiled stuff. I enjoy reading your work very much, and you never disappoint.

a poem with punch.