All Comments on 'The street'

convey really well the dark gritty feel of street life. I think you sort of went overboard with poetic devices (rhyme, assonance, alliteration), but even so it's a strong piece of writing and you have quite a way with words. Keep writing poetry and you'll keep getting better.

Your poem has been recommended in the New Poems Reviews thread on Literotica's Poetry Feedback and Discussion forum. Thanks for the read! :-)

"blistering mace of splintering mace"

Plenty of great lines and mind-bending sensations, but this one... well, it splattered in my face. In a good way.

move Transcendent and Translucent closer, add another Trans...avoid too many lines beginning with The, It start sounding like duh, duh. Very good for a beginning.