All Comments on 'the Temperature of vapour'

I think this is my favorite of yours since I have been here at Lit..love this line especially:

sometimes

time stops to keep it perfect

yeah, thats a comforting thought, and also very enlightening, if true..explains why my time just keeps rolling along...downhill ;) :rose:

thanks razz, and belated happy birthday

As for the alliteration, how about an extra line break to give the reader a pause:

So Many cannot

they are only looking

transient images, vacuous faces

nameless shifts and madding mobs

merely meeting in meandering

manners manifold maunderings

My maudlin drinks

Am I the pianoman

or Only the Trumpeteer

but felt the expansive alliteration at the end was too much and detracted from the whole.