- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Thirst
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Thirst for the wine of the living.
Tasting the sparkling dew drops,
of heavens tears. Aching for all I want.
Knowing it is no use, yet ...
Wish upon the clouds, asking for my desire.
Wrinkle in time, robbing us of speech.
Hypnotizing the unthinkable hardships.
Life has taken my dreams, threw them upon
hot dessert sands. Milking veins of nurturing life,
that has to be. Chuck-holding against the wall of time.
Push off this earth, giving me my hearts' desire.
Wishing to sail away, upon falcons wings.
Scorching sun beats, denouncing all that's good.
Wind combs through, taking all the living.
Trees reach out, choking the fallen moon.
Angels cry, tasting the blood of sea mist.
- COMMENTS
Anonymousover 18 years agoI saw the comment on your other poem about you using lots of big flowery words but never actually saying anything and I have to say that whoever wrote that kinda has a point. your poetry doesn't make me feel anything because I can't get past all your ramblings to actually understand your poem. Does it have a point or were you going for an open verdict kinda write?
You don't have to use lots of big words to be a poet and I think you will learn that as your writing matures. I hope you don't find this harsh I am just being honest and trying to help you improve.
You need to learn alot more before you can attemtp stuff like this, you seem to me to be a childish writer trying to write like an adult.
Just my opinon but I have taught poetry for many years.
Malcom
