All Comments on 'Thirst'

I saw the comment on your other poem about you using lots of big flowery words but never actually saying anything and I have to say that whoever wrote that kinda has a point. your poetry doesn't make me feel anything because I can't get past all your ramblings to actually understand your poem. Does it have a point or were you going for an open verdict kinda write?

You don't have to use lots of big words to be a poet and I think you will learn that as your writing matures. I hope you don't find this harsh I am just being honest and trying to help you improve.

You need to learn alot more before you can attemtp stuff like this, you seem to me to be a childish writer trying to write like an adult.

Just my opinon but I have taught poetry for many years.

Malcom

This is a tasty bit of poetry, RhymeFairy. ;)