All Comments on 'To Make A Human'

and brilliant. I love the imagery here, esp in the stanza:

'Round glasses on eternal eyes

pushed up to rub the bridges of your nose;

invite each spawned illegal soul to complicate

and to love the hacker and the virus both.'

Pure genius

...have shown me enough skill and elegance in previous poems that i always read you when i see you have a new piece.

this poem? . . . IMO, you are trying too hard, reaching toward some innovation or super-unique images you perhaps think will make your writing stronger. for me, this poem doesn't work. it is too obvious from the start, and the first time i have ever cringed slightly at any of your efforts.

i would suggest you stay grounded, and rely on natural ability, which you have in abundance. keep it in the real world, where you have such a keen eye and a way to get at the little, important things.

was mentioned in the New Poems Review!

S&D

and beautiful. Thank you.