All Comments on 'Trapped in Elmo's World'

I think this poem has quite a bit of promise.

It is full of interesting phrases as well as all the Sesame street images.

It might benefit from some restructuring of form,

but if you reshape it be careful not to lose the innocence of Elmo.

Learn to live for life's tickles!

Writing can be excellent therapy. This poem is quite original. I do like the part about "Still scribbling outside the lines and never improving."

A llttle dijointed in parts but very thought provoking overall.

to feeling hurt than the fall down, go boom, type pain. And sesame street is not alway s applicable to life, unless you happen to actually live there..mentally, or otherwise

keep writing, you will eventually improve with all the helpful people here at Lit