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Thought I was doing so good here till I tripped up on your whales; help me out here with the meaning of the whales.

Mystical rendering ~ Streetcar Islands such rich and sometimes whimsical images. A poetic delight!

LeBroz and dudle146, thank you for your kind comments here and under some of my other poems.

First of all I count on the direct image, here a lot of water. You know how whales get stuck on shores. (In general, without the direct image there is only junk and pseudo-poetry).

Then, optionally, there is also the parallel image, totally city.

Our days do not belong to the skaldic poetry era , when readers were raised and trained on kennings and metaphors, hence the second reading of my poem is not available to the great majority of the readers. Recently, I have posted on the Literotica Poetry Board an introduction to the "diagonal kennings". I may write a more advanced part two, about the -iterated- diagonal kennings and metaphors, based on "warsaw". I've written "warsaw" or rather "warszawa" (the first version was in Polish) a long time ago, when I just got the understanding of (diagonal) kennings (in particular, I have recognized then the crucial difference between the diagonal kennings and extractions). Since the Internet arrived, I was trying to share my knowledge with others, it may push poetry to a higher level, but... but but but... :-)

Warsaw & San Jose are the two cities to which I got attached (I worked and lived in San Jose but one year, the whole 1995). Thus it is only just that my other kenning intensive poem is "San Jose".

LeBroz, whales are reasonably (:-) soft, so I hope that you didn't bruise yourself too bad. I'll help you to get up on the Lit Poe Board. I still hope that even without any additional tools, the direct image was already a reward for the reading.

Best regards,

Senna Jawa

LeBroz and dudle146, thank you for your kind comments here and under some of my other poems.

First of all I count on the direct image, here a lot of water. You know how whales get stuck on shores. (In general, without the direct image there is only junk and pseudo-poetry).

Then, optionally, there is also the parallel image, totally city.

Our days do not belong to the skaldic poetry era , when readers were raised and trained on kennings and metaphors, hence the second reading of my poem is not available to the great majority of the readers. Recently, I have posted on the Literotica Poetry Board an introduction to the "diagonal kennings". I may write a more advanced part two, about the -iterated- diagonal kennings and metaphors, based on "warsaw". I've written "warsaw" or rather "warszawa" (the first version was in Polish) a long time ago, when I just got the understanding of (diagonal) kennings (in particular, I have recognized then the crucial difference between the diagonal kennings and extractions). Since the Internet arrived, I was trying to share my knowledge with others, it may push poetry to a higher level, but... but but but... :-)

Warsaw & San Jose are the two cities to which I got attached (I worked and lived in San Jose but one year, the whole 1995). Thus it is only just that my other kenning intensive poem is "San Jose".

LeBroz, whales are reasonably (:-) soft, so I hope that you didn't bruise yourself too bad. I'll help you to get up on the Lit Poe Board. I still hope that even without any additional tools, the direct image was already a reward for the reading.

Best regards,

Senna Jawa

Below, I have posted the same comment twice -- one copy for duddle146, and one for LeBroz. Also, I have problems with my Internet connection.

Been following your discussions on kennings on the PFD (Poetry Feedback and Discussion) forum. And like I told you, when reading that it feels so much like being back in school. Would be curious to see you dissect this piece; diagramming kennings reminds me in a way of diagramming sentences in grammar. Glad to see you bringing more serious discussions about poetry to the forum. There's been too much puff there for way too long.

was brilliant but this is a poetic masterpiece