- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Where Faeries Find Us
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Click hereI remember how our souls met once.
I know the faeries smiled on us.
It grew past our curfew,
as we ran and played,
sang and laughed,
flowers blooming
inside my heart’s garden.
I know the faeries danced with us.
Friends for life, that’s what I thought
I guess my heart wanted more.
I know the faeries tried to warn me.
A weed in my garden,
for I was too greedy
and so afraid of my longing,
that in the late hour I ran away,
safely tucked inside my guilt.
And now I know that faeries weep.
- COMMENTS
softsmileabout 13 years agoAuthorI appreciate the feedback very much... helps me spread my writing wings!
1201, not a joke, however I DID go back to try and read my poem through a humorous lens, most amusing...thank you for that! *grin*
Your further critique is duly noted, and appreciated, as well.
twelveooneabout 13 years agoyou are involved, fatal error calling attention in bold to something that does not demand it. First two lines are dreadful. Can 'em. So what we have )avoiding the faeries, is S1 F; S2 C; S3 (in context) B; S4 A,
last stanza so good, and because 1,2,3 and 4, I know, I know, I know, and now I almost suspect a bit of a joke, 5 anyway
