by ramonathompson
This, like so much of your poetry, isn't that good
Some helpful suggestions:
1) Take some time to actually READ some poetry. See how poets craft their poems and apply this.
2) Experiment with taking a sharp image and wrapping your poem around that
3) Think about writing other things. All this silliness doesn't make for great poetry. Look around your world and find things that you truly care about. It can be anything, someone you care about, an event, even an object
4) Revise until your hands bleed
5) Play around
6) Use tight imagery and language. Become a word lover.