All Comments on '10 Minutes'

In your bio you said:

... don't read my stories to read of some sexual act that you've never thought of before; read them because you want to experience what those two felt when they were doing it and how nice it might be if it happened to you. At least that's the goal.

You reached it ... and more. A lovely, erotic story. I hope you'll continue it.

Such moments of desire and emotion all intertwined with lust that burns so deeply. I loved the seductive buildup to your story!

This is very good. Arousing, and at the same time keeping a good atmosphere and a non-silly language. Cudos.

Oh Wow- 100% plus. I was coming from beginning to end

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I really felt the passion between the two people and I could definately identify with them completely. Plus, you leave your reader wanting more and that's good story telling. I'm looking forward to more stories. Suzie

How is it that sex between women can be so intense and at the same time be so calm and soft? Men just don't know these things. Very nice...

Your story had a softness about it, but so well mixed with pure unbridled sex. My nerve endings were stimulated right from the start. Keep up the great writing.

Taking a risk always adds to the excitment of a moment, whether it is jumping from an airplane, sex in a public place or taking a chance on a new lover... Your story captured that excitment wonderfully!!

What a delicious story. Wonderful premise, very well developed, and dialogue that helped further the plot. I enjoyed being inside the character's head, hearing her thoughts--it makes it so much easier to imagine myself in her place. Two smart, sexy women going at it. I love the fact she's loud and self-conscious about it.... so am I ;)

It held my attention all the way through.

Love the way you have them interacting with

one another.

Thanks again,

Julie Van

julie_van30@yahoo.com

M-Y,

Just the type of story we have come to expect from you. Tender, with just a hint of wildness, I love how your two characters challenged each other. That was so sexy and stimulating. So true to life and honest.

Fantastic banter, luv the early age thing. Thought the leaving statement was a bit early in the story, but it produced the right ending - when do we get part 3?

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All I can say is....I was right there! Wow!

It's like you took all those fleeting fantasies I have when I'm running and put them into an actually narrative so much better than I can ever imagine. Thank you, I will definatly be thinking of this one on my next run.

Short, and very enjoyable. I love the way M-Y describes what is going on in her head...almost as if she doesn't deserve what she is experiencing...Very nice.

Okay… You’ve made me jealous, jealous of her, your alter ego, jealous of you because you write so well. </p>

<p>Susana would have scared me some. She’s kind of the type to bring a moving van with her on the second date. Haven’t we been there before?</p>

<p>The scene would definitely scare me to death… and orgasm. </p>

Its a delight to read a story where the characters seem like real people. You do emotion so well.

Well done M.Y, very well done. I couldn't find fault with the story, really. It was exciting, sensual,erotic, just the type of encounter most lesbians, bisexuals and bicurious women can only dream about. I hope I meet my Susanna some day!

...and loving, and giving, and oh-so-hot, hot, hot! Thank you for an exquisitely erotic story. You possess an extraordinary skill with words. I hope to see more of your writing.

This story was so utterly endearing. Such a charm.

The women affirmed each other so powerfully that I felt a tear of happiness for them. Now how good is a story that makes you do that??

...so impressed with this story. It has such a perfect balance of, well, every element a good story should have! Great job, and thanks for the read.

to eternity. Loved the competitive nature of the two women, as well as the aspect of doing something in a public place and trying to be discreet about it. Like a good run, your story left me breathless.

Wonderful story. The teasing is utterly delicious. Very focused and deft. More teasing please...

Got me off twice, thanks so much! Very enjoyable read as well as pleasurable. Well done!

first time i ever read something like it. my underwear is really wet

hot stuff

Need More! NEED MORE!!!

Beautifull. I felt I was there with them.

Sexy and wonderful <3

I adore your story and the way you tell it. This is orders of magnitude better than anything I've found on this website. As a male, I can't fully appreciate the experience of the two characters, but as a person who associates sexual pleasure with emotional connection I admire what you've written. Thank you.

Great story brilliantly told no trash just honest sincerity made you feel you were standing by wanting to be star character . in plain English love it

write another one that continues this, i'm begging you lol, that was sheer genius i actually felt the story, the emotion, everything

Please write another one continuing this story. It is so amamzing and i don't want it to end here!! Please keep going!!!

Fuck me! I think I just cummed...

awww. the end was so sweet. write more? it'd be great

Fantastic. The writing was brilliant and the story just as thrilling. Kudos! A 5 well deserved! Thank you for a great read.

First North Shore, and now this! You truly write beautiful work. Please keep going.

Your story was truly amazing, I only wish we had more of these to, maybe even a series before she left. All in all, amazing. Great job.

Wow, that was amazing, you write beautifully. A very gripping story I wish we could see more of it?

You need to turn this into a series. This story has really inspired me to look into other works of yours. I really enjoyed this. Hot, sexy, and emotional without seeming too fast. Even though they had sex on the first meeting of each other, it really felt genuine and not some hook-up.

M-Y,

very inspiring to me as a guy who appreciates lesbian erotica and also tries to write it. This story needs to be expanded to a short series or write another with extended length.

Sappholust

This story is so hot. Please write more!

... what I'd call a good short story. leaving much room for imagination and lots of questions but starting the right emotions.

Very good work.

I am not female, so I have never experienced the feelings you so well described in your story. Reading this makes me wish I could have watched these two with each other. Not as a guy watching two women get it on, but to somehow be able to experience some of what they were sharing with each other.

Thank you.

*grin* I swear, this was beautiful-- electric one-liner flirtings, a snap-quick connection between the two, and an amazing two characters who find each other oh-so-very attractive. This just bursts with romance and the warm hinting of the rest of their lives. So cute!! XD

You are quite a talented writer ...and lover, if this story is any indication. Thanks for sharing this witty, erotic and moving story.

I'm a lifeguard and first of all, If I walked in and saw that happening... Oh My God.. I would've instantly became wet and probably drop to my knees and just glared. Secondly, this story was quite a delight, just got out of school and was totally looking forward to my 4-day weekend, especially now that ive started it on a high note ;) My friends wanted to hangout like 30mins ago but I told them i'd "Text them when I'm ready". Postponing our plans so I could enjoy this story and myself for awhile. Ahhhh I feel pretty sneaky.. <3

Oh my god! I masturbates to this, it was so good and such a sensation I squirted on my laptop! Thank you so much! Mwah!

I came so hard to this can't wait to read more. You got me so wet!! Thank you ;)

How sweet was that! As a male I can only imagine the excitement of feminine love, but this must surely have been it! Well done! Is there room for a sequel here?

That was wonderful. That was really hot, their sweaty bodies coming together. Susana eating M-Y till she couldn't take anymore. Really nice. Thank you.

Hot is putting it mildly .

Restores my faith, thank you.

" 'Oh, I am so gonna make you orgasm first,' she claimed.

You can never hear that too much, I thought."

That this is the last story you posted, eight years ago. These were all very good. Thanks.

I found a diamond in the rough of wanna be bona fide erotic stories. 10 Minutes will definitely stay with me for days, months and years to come.

I agree with the comment below... just hate it when stories like this was just left there unfinish... its abit unfair to readers... i know writers have lives outside of their writing though i hope if they will leave the story hanging... at least give enough thought on when a follow up will be done or better yet just finish the damn thing prpoerly.

This lovely tale is finished - where they go from here is up to the reader to decide. I join the others who regret M-Y is no longer writing. EP

I've just finished reading your delightful 10 Minutes. I really wish you would continue writing. I know that's selfish of me because it's been so long since you posted a story. Hence the title of my comment. Here's to your happiness!

Wonderful sexy story. I wish there could've been more to this story. I really loved it.

Just so good!

What else can you say?

It's a shame this author seems to have stopped writing.

The authors romance "Nothing between us" is just sublime!

Unbelievable.

No, no— not the lightening-fast relationship or the way-hot first time sex— this is Literotica, and such things happen here all the time. No, it was the idea that a Honolulu County Ocean Safety lifeguard stand would be left unlocked. They’re locked up tight, to keep gear from being stolen (and hot lesbians from having sex).

Otherwise, M-Y is a fine writer, and it’s just a shame she’s no longer writing erotica for us.

Lovely thank you!

M-Y, I saw you updated your profile. This was as promised, "just hot sex." Tender and emotional. I've followed you a long time, for "North Shore" and "Just Between Friends." But I've only just read this story. Will you post again? Your many fans hope so!

Just right. For a first meeting he he.

Yup. I'm glad that I found you. Please let us know when you publish your book. The literary agents and publishing houses out there don't know what they are missing out on. You can always hone your skills on Literotica.