by bzarajic
6 chapters over only 2 pages and not much told just snippets sighs and I was hoping for better
sorry you were disappointed it was only 2 pages here much longer on my computer but I was testing the idea and I have to write in between lectures and assignments more will follow but only a few chapters at a time
This is good. It drew my attention. Please continue as much as you can. Pay no attention to complainers who don't understand how the system works for submissions.
This is certainly interesting for a story plot. Im curious to know more about the protagonist. Keep it coming
Thanx for the feedback from anonymous x 2. I am continuing the story but I have three possible pathways for it and thats the problem at the moment which to follow. I think it will end up being snippets kind of like a montage they use in films - some modern stuff to push the story on some flashbacks to tell the story. I set myself a complicated story which I am glad you like.
This was well written and captures the imagination without being too verbose. Please continue to write. Waiting for more of this story. Thanks.
Thanx for the comments I am at a tricky point on direction for the story. I am conscious that I could get this wrong. I have to combine the story with the erotic but its the balance.
Hi just adding this comment for anyone who reads this story or has left comments. I love feedback so thank you. I am currently working on this story had to take some time out to do an Open University module for my Masters degree so I hope to post the final parts of the story for you very shortly.