All Comments on '26 Stoneybrook Lane'

I give very, very few "5" ratings. This is one. Great work and look forward to maybe another chapter?

I'd have given it six if I could - superb storytelling :)

Fantastic story!

A fantastic story well told.

The story is a very good one. Even better was your writing. Your ability to balance perspectives, especially in the use of the bedroom as a metaphor, added greatly to the storytelling. I look forward to reading more of your work.

Thanks for writing and posting this. Great story, very touching and hot at the same time. Good work.

I wanted more. I wanted to know what happened to Sandra and Beth and what was Sandra's story? Who was the man in the picture in her room? But I guess that is what a good storyteller does - keeps you wanting more.

I will keep looking for more of your posts. You are a gifted writer.

i FEEL THAT MANY OF US HAVE HAD SITUATIONS (THE BIG BULLY ONES) WHERE WE HAD SIMILAR OR NOT SO SIMILAR RESULTS. vERY GOOD STORY, HOLDING ONES INTEREST, PLEASE CONTINUE THE TALE/TAIL. Thank you.

but I an still uncertain as to what happened and to whom.

Yes, our hero took on the bully, but what was the relationship he had with Beth? and for that matter, what was the relationship shared by the siblings?

Where are they now? and by they, I mean any of them?

needs more to this story

Most of the stories on this site are terrible and badly written. This one isn't, it is one of the best I have read in a long time. This guy knows how to write - a rare gift.

What a great story you've written here! I too would like to know more, but if it ends here, so be it!

It can stand alone as a well written and well told story!

Thanks for a great effort!

Great story and well written! I agree with one of the other posters. I would love to read more but this is a good ending, too.

Perfect! Thanks for sharing your talents!

catch up with beth an sandra

Enjoyed your story.

Your main character (Jason) describes things that were left unexplained, such as the comment made by Sandra about the "our big happy family" that Eddy says he'll explain later. And if Jason had the feelings for Beth that he is remembering, what happened to their relationship? You cannot just expain it away by saying his family moved away. It would seem they would have at least made an effort to keep in touch. Just feels like there were too many loose ends. (Not to mention that Jason, Eddy and Beth appear under eighteen years old at the time of the incident in the attic, along with the continuing sexual relationship between Jason and Beth prior to both turning eighteen.)

Nice story, but you need to fill in the gaps. The story kept getting interrupted by your vocabulary. Yes, I had to look up the words, and that interrupts the story. Keep at it though, it is a start!

it was a beautifully written story thank you again

Excellent work would like to see follow up.you have the touch.

Sir I enjoyed the remeniscing. I have done similar, but I feel that the REAL story is the loss of Eddy. I did not know him, but I have family and friends that have served over there, and some did not come back alive.

Have closure and say your goodbyes, live life as he would want you to.

This has got to be one of the best stories I have read here on Literotica..

It brings back some serious memories of day and events that brought tears...

Thanks man...

you just disappeared when there was a lot more story to tell

Wish could know family dimanics

What goes around comes around. Good story with excellent results!HL22QF

Why was the "Happy Family" not explained? Was Eddy getting it on with Sandra? Also if they moved out of the house why were belongings left in the attic? Do you have something against Nebraska? Huskers are college football players & anyone else would be a Husker fan.

Excellent story but it's unfinished. What happened to the four of them after the big showdown? What was the family secret?