by 32yrsago
Takes me back to the same place - the smell of her hair is still with me.
Author, you got me.
I can feel the breathless-ness from too many years ago.
Please do us all a favour and don't leave us hanging.
It will be good to hear the rest of this story, then some more, too.
This is the wish fulfilment of any teenage boy. Looking forward to pt.2
Thank you so much for sharing your story with us! I agree with another one of the commenters, it's realistic & compassionate. You give a glimpse into your experience and thoughts, not just a "blow-by-blow".
Please continue!
A realistic and compasionate story, not like some of the urealistic stories I read on these pages.
I will be most disapointed if there is no follow up.
I'm not going to get on your case, but there is a silly typo in the first paragraph, and a couple of other things that you should have picked up on when you proof read.
However the story struck a lot of familiar chords with me... for me it was the 70s not the 80s but not so different. You got the atmosphere dead right.
So, nice story, enjoyable flow. Just a bit more care with the technicalities please.
Looking forward to Part 2
All the best
Tom D