All Comments on 'A Bad Boy's Love Ch. 01'

very nice with a kinky thread to it. I like it.

Do people enjoy this sort of crap?

Good start. I look forward to seeing where you go with this.

Keep going!

Nice. I want to know how it ends, so I hope you write another chapter!

This is GREAT!! you should keep going and ignore anyone who says different, after all I don't see them writing anything worth looking at.

keep up the good work

that was hot cant wait till the next installment

thought the story was great... i love the little bit of kink mixed with discovery, keep them coming :-D

Someone has been reading yaoi manga and put it to use? lols.

I mean, I don't have anything against the way you write. I actually think it's going pretty well.

But just too fake, it irritates me when people do that. Finished a dialogue with one language, at least, or just use one word. It's trying too hard, don't you think?

loved everything but... isn't Kei shorter than the speaker? he can't "smirk down" on the speaker...

Fighting men is hot. Very hot.

The speech is a little over-scripted, it doesn't feel very natural, and it is indeed quite reflective of the typical anime-style most-popular-kid-in-school theme, but it's still good. I would probably be turned on by his Japanese too.

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talk about HOT! I'm REALLY looking forward to the rest of this story :-)

Happy Writing!

even if its d typical bad-boy one! XD I've read this story Over n over so many times I can't count on my hands! n now I'm reading it again! can u do another one of these??? =D

with d sexy jap in! =P

I love your story.

It reminds me of my pass stories actually. (But I'm new to Literotica. Hope to get to know each other.)

Haha, let the games begin.

"I wouldn't call myself narcissistic, but I do think that I'm pretty good-looking." Right there, right at the beginning: Fatal error, if you want your character to be liked. Think - what would you think of a guy who said this? He's an arsehole, right? If the narrator of your story is good-looking, bring that in in some other way - in dialogue, in conversation overheard, or by creating situations that make it clear others find him attractive. For him to say he finds himself "pretty good-looking" is a major, MAJOR turn-off.

"I wouldn't call myself narcissistic, but I do think that I'm pretty good-looking. With 6 feet 2" worth of muscle and cobalt blue-colored eyes, plus a better-than-average dress sense . . ." Bad start. We don't want to read about arrogant, self-centred people. Also, no human being has "cobalt blue eyes" - ever. (Find out what cobalt blue looks like.) Think carefully how you start a story - in this case, we have a jumped-up lier as narrator, which isn't a good start.

Alright, that was positively brilliant. And don't let anyone tell you otherwise. It was far from over scripted; it was real. Most stories are under scripted, so this comes off as realistic. Thanks, bro.

Sounds like they are as bad as each other, so they will either be the best of friends or.... ouch, can't wait

Hot story and like the Japanese-American power exchange component!