All Comments on 'A Band of Brigands Ch. 1'

I think you're decent. My grading is relative to my perfectionism so I grade hard, but you wanted it so now you're gonna get it. Your enviornment description is thin. Especially your start. There is one small paragraph about the punch in line. You don't build a scene or style, just rush through like if you can't stand to get the story rolling along your plot line. And before you get too into the story you should find a way to develop your character or else your story will start of with a trite introduction. Keep practicing. It's decent ameteur work. If that's what you want to be then take a look around and enjoy the view because that's where you are. Either get used to the surroundings or strive harder. It's all relative to what you want. I'd like to hear your answer. quickquib@netzero.com Peace!

Realistic portrayal of the challenges of bachelorhood.

Would love to read about the history of these characters - what's the background story? Why do they do these things they do? One thing is certain, I'm intrigued and I want more. You're a hell of a great writer and I love your style. More please! Yes? YES!