All Comments on 'A Birthday Favor Ch. 01'

There are a few gramatical errors and spelling mistakes. Spell check, anyone? The storyline was okay, a little predictable and cliche. Good description of the sex though; glad you described the girls.

this story started off pretty hot...keep it up!

ladywolf i think the story is great keep up the great writing .

I thought it was great...it helped me get to where I was wanting to go. I am saving part 2 for next time.