All Comments on 'A Break in My Routine Ch. 02'

Man, you really need someone to proof read your work. The last sentence in chapter one made no sense at all. In chapter two, you had the daughter remove her clothes twice during the same scene. The firt time she didn't do it eroticly, but the second time, she did a little strip tease. You need an editor! Also the ending was dissapointing. Oh, and Americans don't say "bum". They say "butt". Good luck.

I love their growing relationship. Let him get the plaster off, soon - so he can take her fully.

Yes to the editing - no to 'butt', stick with the English 'bum'.

Lukas

You read to enjoy the story, not nitpick it. If you are going to tear something apart, at least have the fucking balls to sign your name, not ANONYMOUS.

wonderful story, thanks

Nothing left to say,,,,ESPETEROH, YOU'RE THE bEST !!EXCELLENT WORK !

Out of all the things i've read on here, yours is really something that builds up. I expected just 'Fuck me daddy' and afew 'I love yous', but yours really adds some suspence to this. Great job!

you had the daughter get undressed at least 2 times (once before the BJ and again after grabbing the comforter )

Agree with other comments about undressing twice, but I find the fact that he is in the shower with an arm and leg is a cast rather odd. Casts are not waterproof normally and tend to get soft and become flexible when wet, therefore unable to do the job they were designed for.

It's a good story but could have done with another pair of eyes going over it ( an editor ) before submission.

Hot story! Too bad you will probably never finish this and will simply leave the three of them hanging on the bed forever!!

good finish but lots of silly mistakes, someone else needs to read it before publishing it.