by Lost Boy
Well written story. Plot being slowly and presumed logically. I normally do not read scfi nor fantasy; however, this story has reeled me in, so far.
Excellent tale bordering on a classic. Extremely well thought out and written with great characters, drama, angst and of course sex! Looking forward to reading more. I appreciate your and your Muse's imagination and abilities to bring it to your story. Thank you for sharing your vision and talents.
Good story! I'm liking the mystery of it. reminds me of a book I read years ago, "Riddle of Stars" by Patricia McKillup, an excellent Author who just recently died. Thanks. 5 BIG STARS!
Thanks, I hate it. I read the first part and liked it a lot. Part 1 was very good and seemed to set a tone for good carefree fun and love.
Then part 2 starts and its all incredibly forced and contrived this was a really weird and unnecessary change to the foundation of the story. It would have made more sense to have this be its own separate thing then a part of the previous story, these two stories are just way to different.
The ending is not an ending; but a beginning if I am Correct!!!!!!!!!!!!
This is interesting but it feels really crazy. Like the author couldn't decide on a plot and just escalated with every paragraph.
Weirdness. I'll keep reading to see if it comes together or not.
The only problem I have is that it whent from no one knowing he was screwing his mom and sister in chapter 1 to the whole family knowing in chapter 2. Did I miss something?
I am taking a break from Spell... i am working on part 3 as i write this. I should have it done pretty soon. I will post on my profile when i submit it. If you have any suggestions feel free to contact me. Thanks.
Please please please tell me you haven't finished this . It's been nearly two year since you finished chapter 2. There's too many unanswered questions . Who wins the Fuck Off. Does the brother end up pumping out dozen kids with his sister so the family names continues seems there are the only ones who can...does he make them all pregnant. Does he survive or does he go mad like his predecessor soooo many question YOU need to answer. Clearly your still writing as you posted new stories this year Your on a winner here so finish it and show us all what a truely gifted writer you are.....
5 stars
I see you are still writing, so how about finishing (A Brief Moment of Insanity)?
Your have a talent that is quite sure by your stories and the development and detail rhat you put into them. I salute you. My talent is enjoying and reading GOOD writing.
I hope you health improves and allows you to continue this masterful talent. Thank you for sharing it with us. GP
You have some amazing talent please tell you you at least have one more chapter
I love this story it is great shame that it is left unfinished you have a talent
The total story is an amazing work of art the story has a great story line but if I can make a suggestion before u upload it you should check ur grammar and spelling
ps I totally love it
So far it's a great story. I will hold off my judgement until you finish it.
I hope you will finish this and not leave us hanging. A great story so far
Love the story to this point. I would like to see how Warren dealt with his power and the females of his immediate family/household
i liked the 1st chapter this 1 got a little weird... i hope you finish the story though
I think this is good enough to be a movie- it is great, can't wait for the end.
Ignore the other comments. Please finish the story.
Engaging quick read.
I would love to see the fuck off as a combatant skill scenario with a score sheet and sensitive violence.
im completly lost we went from a fuck off to being just plain fucked up this story went out there way out there sucking and fucking to i dont know what happened write more please and make sense of it all for me please
I will try to remember to look for it. Thank you for writing even though it IS a bit confusing.
Maybe even enough of a departure to have warranted a different title? You really took a ninety degree turn with this one. Not bad, but really, really different from where you seemed to be headed with the original chapter, all those many months ago.
I really want to see what is going to happed next to the young lad. I hope that all of the information he has learned will make him the super stud he will need to be in the fuck-off.
Thanks for the read.
The story is aptly named...very confusing...too many jumps without enough info....hope you will tie it all up some time with some clarity.
so confused. did mom plan to get soaked in the rain storm?why does everyone know about the secret tryst that was planned?was the whole thing from rain to phone call leading to this weird family tree psychotic nightmare?
Took a perfectly good fucking story and turned it into another piece of shit vampire toilet trout.