All Comments on 'A Bumbling Suitor'

the story was above average but seemed like you got bored and finished to quickly

At the divorce settlement, you brought in the name David a couple of times. Was that a slip, or did I miss another participant there?

Great story, as usual!

Um, er...would you believe Douglas? Yep. Towards the end of writing (and no I wan't bored as alleged by another reader)I changed David's name to Douglas and missed changing a couple when reviewing the text. My usual incompetence. Sorry. I can confuse my readers enough without tossing in unintroduced characters. Signed Dunce er Egmont Grigor

I enjoyed how you had me continually guessing who Douglas was going to end up with. I did feel a little "cheated" that someone new was brought into the mix late in the story, but it also makes sense that someone new would be needed for Douglas to settle with.

i liked most of the story, but the ending was rushed and well, that kinda spoiled things for me. 75 for the rest of the story though.

If you would ever overcome your shyness and actually finish this story, I would give it a '5.5". In lieu of a worthy ending, I can only rate it a mere "3.4". Of course, in this grading system, that results in a puny "3". You are a far better better writer and author than your stories give evidence to...all due to no endings on them.

got very confusing as to who was shagging who or dipping their wick in to......just one big fuck-fest.....

he should fuck all the women again just to show appreciation that he is now a romantic. then they should take turns shoving a huge dildo up his ass to show they care. if this is a romance then my asshole is the picture of love...

This was romance? Where? I also was a bit taken aback by the daughters (which one?) commenting he was basically a man-whore. Funny, as the one daughter cheated on him first, the other talked about seducing him, and the last one did seduce him. And he has the problems?

I didn't see that coming, good story though

Douglas's final words, "I'm going to loosen you up a bit more." Thanks great entertaining story.